Revisions
- Slight edits to sentence structures, punctuation and citation i.e. quoting
- Talked a little bit about cultural literacy in the “social interactions” paragraph, would provide clarity on how the life skills learnt from this event could be advantageous in the future where adapting to the fast-pace of post-university culture is integral
- Spoke a little bit about growth mindset using source material, adds a little more depth to the paragraph about the independence that is formed when facing adversity
- Build on third-person risk narrative so as to have a smoother transition into the first-person narrative, also included another source material to solidify my point and add credible evidence
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